J. Haux

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The armoury was dimly lit; the candlelight flickered in the razor sharp blades and breast plates. It seemed almost as if the room was full of people, the fiery eyes ...

Alrighty. My little sister read this, and while I was reading over her shoulder, I remembered something I had wanted to tell you. I'm going to get into a specific... ...

The conversation at the end was also pretty funny; did it really take place for real??? Yeah. Jacquie: Just a note. Most everything in this post is Searria's exact words, ...

*reads Anair's post* You obviously haven't read all of it... :-# I think part of the reason I was disappointed in Eldest was because I had forseen much of it. ...

You did compare them. You said they were both brilliantly written. I don't think they are on the same level, thought-wise. Inheritance? I guess we're looking at it differently, Zel. ...

You've edited without changing much at all. I must not have explained very well, sorry. I only have a little time, so: Put periods on the end of sentences, not ...

You've gone back and added description, I see. Very nice. There's just a few things I'll mention, later. But good job!

You can also edit this post directly. There's a little button that says "edit" at the top of each of your posts. I'm Jacquie, by the way. I would have ...

Listen to Snoink.

First of all, there is more than one way to revise your piece, not just Nox's suggestions. Don't take her examples word for word; else, it will be her writing, ...

It just makes it harder to read. This should also probably be under Science Fiction.

this is making fun of BILL CLINTON not bush People aren't catching that, are they? *slightly amused* I think I heard the first one before.

Then congradulations! That's the mark of a good writer. :D Well...fencing is less like that, it's more of a sport, no "stunts". Still very complicated. But your writing held resemblance ...

I think when you're hurling every five minutes, it's the perfect time for editing...this neglectance is shameful! ! None of us expect you to edit when you're ill. Sleep. Rest. ...